Thesis:
Darfur is Dying and Planet Green game both emit strong messages about how our world is suffering, but Planet Green Game depicts their problem in a more reasonable and understandable way.
Outline:
Intro: discus the games and give pointers on how they are played
Body 1: explain in depth Planet Green Game
Body 2: explain in depth Darfur is Dying
Body 3: contrast the differences in both games and explain why PGG’s message is relayed better
Closing: summarize

8 comments:
YOUR THESIS SEEMS REALLY GOOD, AND UPON READING YOUR OUTLINE, I SAW THAT I DID MINES WRONG, SO THANKS.
Your thesis is great, and it seems like you have a good understanding about what you want to write about in your paper from you outline.
Your thesis is very good and i loved the way you decided to outline your paper, I think I should try that also, thanks.
Your thesis is totally soilid and I like how you've devided up your support.
Facts, Opinion and draws you in. nicely done!
Your thesis is written well because it's not too wordy and its straight to the point. I think the outline is also good, and you seem to know what you want to write about.
I am also doing those two games and I really like how you wrote your thesis. It sounds like you know exactly what to write, keep it up.
I like your thesis because I agree that some videogames are more effective in delivering a message. I mention this in my paper when comparing the two.
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